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Sample Student Resume for Music Graduate School Admission - Critique

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In this sample resume critique, the certified professional resume writer at ResumeEdge explains the process of creating the client's "after" resume from the client's "before" resume.Sample Resume

So that you may easily compare them to judge the quality of ResumeEdge's work, both the "before" and "after" sample resumes are linked below. They are also linked from the Sample Resumes page.Sample Resume

Sample Resume Critique

Dear Janice ~

Because your resume is being used for admission to a graduate program, I condensed your material from a two-page into a one-page document. A one-page resume is the industry standard.

After carefully studying your academic and professional background, I chose a "Student" resume to best display your qualifications to an admissions director. A student resume is used when one has superior academic achievements, but little to no work history.

Given your music background, I further formatted your resume so that it would look elegant. To that end, I placed your name flush left, increasing its size until it stood out from the rest of the text. I placed your most important contact information (phone number & email) above the line and your physical address below the line.

I began your resume with a brief "Qualifications" section in which I summarized and emphasized those qualifications I felt would most interest an admissions director. To begin, I wrote of you as a Graduate Candidate (since the resume is being used to secure admission to a graduate school), then wrote of your solid academic background in Music, including a Teacher's License (this expresses your dedication to academics).

I next wrote of your linguistic capabilities."bilingual with fluency in Japanese and English." Then I wrote of your volunteer history and your proven leadership skills as the president of the Alumni for Women's University-High School Alumni.

Please note: Due to space considerations, I was unable to add your membership in the Catholic Church choir. I felt its inclusion did not warrant the resume going to two pages.

Next, I made mention of your solo performance with the University. This gives an admissions director a good idea of your activities and musical expertise. I then ended this section with your computer skills.

With your outstanding academic record, I listed that section next (along with Licensing and Honors), organizing the data so that all of the courses you took at the Women's University are listed under that heading.

Also, I put your schooling in reverse chronological order, which meant that the HIGH Academy listing comes after the Women's University College of Continuing Education, rather than Georgetown University as you had it.

Next, I listed your Professional Experience. Here, I began each bullet point with the strongest action verb possible, while also rewriting the text for clarity and conciseness.

For example, you wrote:

"Filed documents about CEO's work and reports from staff."

I revised that to read:

"Update and maintain files." (Because you're the CEO's secretary it's understood that it would be his files you maintain.)

For the next section, I chose to list your internships. These are far more informative for an admissions director, than your volunteer experience.

Again, due to space considerations, I was forced to condense your volunteer experience. After reading the bullet points in your old resume, I concluded that much of what you did as a volunteer was in an administrative assistant / secretarial capacity that does little to impress an admissions director. Better to condense this material than to risk the resume going to two pages.

All decisions to modify or exclude data were in keeping with the guidelines and standards set forth by the Professional Association of Resume Writers (PARW). With this resume, you now have a powerful tool that's well organized and filled with pertinent data, while also being aesthetically pleasing.

It was a pleasure serving you, Janice. Best of luck in all your future endeavors.

ResumeEdge Editor
Certified Professional Resume Writer (CPRW)

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