Sample Resume for a Fashion Executive - Critique
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the process of creating the client's "after" resume from the client's "before" resume.
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Sample Resume Critique
Dear Donna ~
Not only are your qualifications impressive, but your industry
- Fashion - is so unique and compelling that I agree with your
choice of Design #11 which combines the "accomplishment" facets
of an "executive" template with more stylish aspects. The result
is both dynamic and aesthetically pleasing.
I began your resume by employing a Qualifications section. This
brief paragraph summarizes and emphasizes your many talents. Unlike
an objective that tells a hiring manager what you want, a Qualifications
summary tells them what you can offer their company.
You're sending a powerful message when you put a hiring manager's
needs over your own. Also, your objective would limit the companies
where you could distribute your resume. Now, you can place your
objective in a cover letter, tailoring it to fit the specific company.
I wrote that you're results-oriented and that you "successfully
reorganized numerous organizations ensuring survival and growth
during economic downturns."
I then wrote of your leadership capabilities in "…revitalizing
and launching products, devising effective advertising campaigns,
and restructuring territories for maximum profitability." I mentioned
some of the better-known brands that you managed, then ended with
your linguistic capabilities - a plus in today's world marketplace.
In the Professional Experience section, I separated your accomplishments
from the rest of the text, and began each bullet point with the
strongest action verb possible, while also revising the text for
clarity, conciseness, and maximum impact.
I chose from among the sentence fragments you supplied as well
as the results of our phone interview, to create what I consider
a very compelling resume. I also formatted your web resume to look
exactly like your traditional resume.
I ended your resume with the education section.
In many instances, I either combined data or excluded it, especially
the repeated mention of ensuring employee teamwork. To repeat this
beneath each job listing is redundant and really doesn't add to
your other excellent qualifications. Best to state this in the
first two jobs and allow other duties to come forward in the following
listings.
All decisions to modify or exclude data were in keeping with
the guidelines and standards set forth by the Professional Association
of Resume Writers (PARW). With this resume you now have a powerful
tool that's well organized and filled with pertinent data.
It was a pleasure serving you, Donna. Best of luck in all
your future endeavors.
ResumeEdge Writer
Certified Professional Resume Writer (CPRW)
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