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Sample Resume for a Fashion Executive - Critique

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About this Sample Resume Critique

In this sample resume critique, the certified professional resume writer at ResumeEdge explains the process of creating the client's "after" resume from the client's "before" resume.Sample Resume

So that you may easily compare them to judge the quality of ResumeEdge's work, both the "before" and "after" sample resumes are linked below. They are also linked from the Sample Resumes page.Sample Resume

Sample Resume Critique

Dear Donna ~

Not only are your qualifications impressive, but your industry - Fashion - is so unique and compelling that I agree with your choice of Design #11 which combines the "accomplishment" facets of an "executive" template with more stylish aspects. The result is both dynamic and aesthetically pleasing.

I began your resume by employing a Qualifications section. This brief paragraph summarizes and emphasizes your many talents. Unlike an objective that tells a hiring manager what you want, a Qualifications summary tells them what you can offer their company.

You're sending a powerful message when you put a hiring manager's needs over your own. Also, your objective would limit the companies where you could distribute your resume. Now, you can place your objective in a cover letter, tailoring it to fit the specific company.

I wrote that you're results-oriented and that you "successfully reorganized numerous organizations ensuring survival and growth during economic downturns."

I then wrote of your leadership capabilities in "…revitalizing and launching products, devising effective advertising campaigns, and restructuring territories for maximum profitability." I mentioned some of the better-known brands that you managed, then ended with your linguistic capabilities - a plus in today's world marketplace.

In the Professional Experience section, I separated your accomplishments from the rest of the text, and began each bullet point with the strongest action verb possible, while also revising the text for clarity, conciseness, and maximum impact.

I chose from among the sentence fragments you supplied as well as the results of our phone interview, to create what I consider a very compelling resume. I also formatted your web resume to look exactly like your traditional resume.

I ended your resume with the education section.

In many instances, I either combined data or excluded it, especially the repeated mention of ensuring employee teamwork. To repeat this beneath each job listing is redundant and really doesn't add to your other excellent qualifications. Best to state this in the first two jobs and allow other duties to come forward in the following listings.

All decisions to modify or exclude data were in keeping with the guidelines and standards set forth by the Professional Association of Resume Writers (PARW). With this resume you now have a powerful tool that's well organized and filled with pertinent data.

It was a pleasure serving you, Donna.  Best of luck in all your future endeavors.

ResumeEdge Writer
Certified Professional Resume Writer (CPRW)

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