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Sample Resume for a Bank Executive - Critique

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In this sample resume critique, the certified professional resume writer at ResumeEdge explains the process of creating the client's "after" resume from the client's "before" resume.Sample Resume

So that you may easily compare them to judge the quality of ResumeEdge's work, both the "before" and "after" sample resumes are linked below. They are also linked from the Sample Resumes page.Sample Resume

Sample Resume Critique

Dear Michael ~

As you requested, I used Design #9 for your resume. The small graphic at the top does, indeed, add an international "flavor" to the final document, as you wanted.

In the body of the resume, I began with a profile section in which I bulleted and emphasized your most important qualifications. In addition to your expertise in Equity Investment, Co-financing, and Foreign Direct Investment Mobilization I wrote of your linguistic capabilities and the fact that you manage multi-million dollar projects for a world clientele. 

In the following section, I listed your Professional Experience. I began each bullet with the strongest action verb possible, while also revising the text for clarity, conciseness, and maximum impact.

For example, you wrote:

"Started up the Mongolian Cooperation Fund in the amount of EUR 9.3 million funded by Japan, the Netherlands and Luxembourg."

I revised that to read:

"Established the EUR $9.3 million Mongolian Cooperation Fund financed by Japan, the Netherlands, and Luxembourg."

In another example, you wrote:

"Lead arranged the USD 300 million Syndicated Loan of National Bank of Hungary."

I revised that to read:

"Secured a US $300 million syndicated loan from the National Bank of Hungary." 

In one instance you wrote "German sovereign borrowers…" I revised that to read, "German officials."

In another example you wrote, "in charge of 30 corporates." I changed corporates to entities. 

I condensed your internships because of space considerations and because your professional experience is sufficient to impress a hiring manager.

After the Education section, I ended your resume with your information on Conferences. 

All decisions to modify data were in keeping with the guidelines and standards set forth by the Professional Association of Resume Writers (PARW). With this resume, you now have a powerful tool that's well organized and filled with pertinent data, while also being aesthetically pleasing.

It was a pleasure serving you, Michael. Best of luck in all your future endeavors.

ResumeEdge Writer
Certified Professional Resume Writer (CPRW)

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